雅思大作文写作方法(3)

What’s more, it is apparent that modern society has superiority over traditional ones in quality of life. Unlike traditional societies, modern society leads people to know how to entertain and relax themselves and enjoy their life. People in traditional societies may be thriftier, but a boring and stereotype life style cannot satisfy people’s increasing demand for material life. Life also needs creativity and novelty. (64 words) （用逻辑连接词what’s more引出支持现代社会的第二个理由。）

Nothing in the world, nevertheless, is perfect and modern society is no exception. There is no denying that some selfish and greedy people exist in modern society, but this is not a proper reason why we should go back to traditional societies. There is no doubt that there must also be a lot of selfish and greedy people in traditional

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【Abby阿布整理】雅思大作文写作方法+常用表达 Abby阿布留留学/315487 ———————————————————————————————————————— societies. Going back to traditional societies, therefore, can by no means solve the problem. (73 words)（用逻辑连接词nevertheless引出现代社会存在的问题，然后指出传统社会存在同样问题。对比法。）

To sum up, any society, modern or traditional, has its own merits and demerits and we cannot focus only on one side. Modern society, though disliked by some people, command my preference. (32 words)

得分：８分

这篇文章和范例５的风格一样，采用５段式的结构，每段的词数和内容都控制的很好。而且最可贵的是，不像有些提供的例文给人感觉很花哨且不实用，这两篇８分的例文都是按照应试作文的结构来写的，注重实用，而不炫耀文采。因此，给人感觉８分并不是那么的遥远。

范例6-7

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.

Overall, I disagree with the opinion expressed. I would like to begin by pointing out that ‘traditional skills and ways of life’ are not automatically of one country, but of a culture or community.

In many ways, the history of civilization is the history of technology: from the discovery of fire to the invention of the wheel to the development of the Internet, we have been moving on from previous ways of doing things. Some technologies, such as weapons of mass destruction, are of negative impact. Others, such as medical advances, positively help people to live better or longer, and so very much help traditional ways of life. Surely, few people would seek to preserve such traditions as living in caves!

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Interestingly, technology can positively contribute to the keeping alive of traditional skills and ways of life. For example, the populations of some islands are too small to have normal schools. Rather than breaking up families by sending children to the mainland, education authorities have been able to use the Internet to deliver schooling online. In addition, the Internet, and modern refrigeration techniques, are being used to keep alive the traditional skills of producing salmon; it can now be ordered from, and delivered to, anywhere in the world.

In conclusion, without suggesting that all technology is necessarily good, I think it is by no means ‘pointless’, in any way, to try to keep traditions alive with technology. We should not ignore technology, because it can be our friend and support our way of life. (254 words)

得分：９分

这是一篇有剑桥官方提供的一篇范文，是一篇４段式的作文结构；

从文章我们不难看出，native speaker写文章不会过分追求词汇的宽度和句型的多样。而且让文章的层次很清楚，语句很流畅，没有很做作的感觉；

内容方面，没有太大新意，但阐述得很容易理解；

范例6-8

A rise in the world’s population is having serious, negative effects on the environment. Some scientists believe that the only way to solve the problem is to set up a colony on the Moon. Others argue that the cost would be far too great and other solutions should be sought.

What is your opinion?

The environment is, of course, under serious threat, but the extent to which population growth is responsible may not be as great as some people claim. In fact there are many other factors such as the growth in big cities, pollution from traffic

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【Abby阿布整理】雅思大作文写作方法+常用表达 Abby阿布留留学/315487 ———————————————————————————————————————— and manufacturing, and the destruction of rainforest that probably play a bigger role. It is questionable, therefore, how far a colony on the Moon would help solve the problem.

One of the most serious threats to the global ecosystem is the destruction of the rainforests with an area the size of Europe disappearing every year. And this is largely due to large companies in their pursuit of profit. Indeed, whilst international logging companies claim to use on average 10 percent of the species of trees that make up the rainforest, that 10 percent of species constitute about 90 percent of the volume.

Naturally, if the world’s population was not as large, the demand for wood would be considerably reduced, which would support setting up a colony on the Moon. But even if the colony was set up, how many people in reality, would relocate? Even if the number ran into tens of thousands, the actual effect on the world’s population would be minimal. Indeed, we only need to consider how many people were killed during the two world wars, which ran into millions, to support this claim. Instead, the cost should be transferred into the development of sustainable economies.