英语作文写作之Revising Essays 修改

Revising Essays 修改，润色你的作文

How to evaluate an essay?如何评价一篇作文？ Unity 完整，统一 Support 支持 Coherence 一致性 Sentence Skills 润色句子

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Unity 完整，统一Advance a single point.

Stick to that point.Make sure all sentences Are relevant.Unity Support Coherence Sentence Skills

Sticking to the PointThe Problems of Being Unemployed. No source of income Pleasures of having more free time Social pressures on the unemployed Which of the above doesn’t stick to the point?Unity Support Coherence Sentence Skills

Support 支持，支撑

Give specific evidence to support your topic sentence and thesis.给于特别的证据或是迹象来支持你的观点

Vivid details

生动，清晰的细节

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SupportWhich of the following provides better support? 看一看哪个提供了更好的例子来支撑他们 的观点

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Blaming others is another negative and unproductive way to cope with disappointment. The all-too-common response of pointing the finger at someone else doesn’t help. This posture will only lead to anger, resentment, and further unhappiness. Disappointment in another persons performance doesn’t indicate the performer is at fault. Perhaps expectations were too high or there could have been a misunderstanding.Unity Support Coherence Sentence Skills

The positive way to react to disappointment is to use it as a chance for growth. Helen, the women who wasn’t promoted, could have handled her disappointment by looking at other options. If her boss doesn’t recognize her talent and hard work, perhaps she could transfer to another department. Or she could ask the boss how to improve her performance so that she could be a shoo-in for the next promotion.Unity Support Coherence Sentence Skills

SupportWhich provides better support? Why?

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Coherence 统一性

Is the essay organized in a logical or clear way? Is the essay easy to follow? Does the author use transitional words to act as a guidepost 路标 for the reader?Support Coherence Sentence Skills

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Television makes children passive. Worst of all, TV presents a false picture of reality that leaves viewers frustrated. Television discourages communication.

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Watching T.V has the value of sheer relaxation. In addition to being relaxing, television is entertaining. Most important, television is educational.

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Revising sentences 润色句子

Formatting 格式化Run-ons and fragments

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Revising EssaysUnity- sticking to one point Support- specific details Coherence- organized logically? Flow? Sen

tence Skills- formatting, punctuation, spelling, sentence variety.

Activity: Revising Essays