part V essay writing(9)

or support the topic sentence of the paragraph in which they appear. Cross out the irrelevant sentences and write the numbers of those sentences in the spaces provided.

Playing on the Browns

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For the past three summers, I have played first base on a Softball team known as the Browns. 2We play a long schedule, including playoffs, and everybody takes the games pretty seriously. In that respect, we're no different from any other of the thousand or so teams in our city. 4But in one respect, we are different. 5In an all-male league, we have a woman on the team — me. 6Thus I've had a chance to observe something about human nature by seeing how the men have treated me. 7Some have been disbelieving; some have been patronizing; and, fortunately, some have simply accepted me.

One new team in the league was particularly flabbergasted to see me start the game at first base. 9Nobody on the Comets had commented one way or the other when he saw me warming up, but playing in the actual game was another story. 10The Comets' first-base coach leaned over to me with a disbelieving grin and said, \mean, you're starting, and those three guys are on the bench?\11I nodded and he shrugged, still amazed. 12He probably thought I was the manager's wife. 13When I came up to bat, the Comet pitcher smiled and called to his outfielders to move way in on me. Now, I don't have a lot of power, but I'm not exactly feeble. I used to work out on the exercise machines at a local health club until it closed, and now I lift weights at home a couple of times a week. I wiped the smirks off their faces with a line drive double over the left fielder's head.

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The next game, we played another new team, the Argyles, and their attitude

was patronizing. 18The Argyles had seen me take batting practice, so they didn't do

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anything so rash as to draw their outfield way in. They had respect for my ability as a player. 20However, they tried to annoy me with phony concern. 21For example, a redheaded Argyle got on base in the first inning and said to me, \careful, Hon. 22When you have your foot on the bag, somebody might step on it. 23You can get hurt in this game.\24I was mad, but I have worked out several mental techniques to control my anger because it interferes with my playing ability. 25Well, this delicate little girl survived the season without injury, which is more than I can say for some of the \

The number of the irrelevant sentence: ________.

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Happily, most of the teams in the league have accepted me, just as the Browns did. The men on the Browns coached and criticized me (and occasionally cursed me) just like anyone else. Because I'm a religious person, I don't approve of cursing, but I don't say anything about it to my teammates. 29They are not amazed when I get a hit or stretch for a wide throw. 30My average this year was higher than the averages of several of my teammates, yet none of them acted resentful or threatened. 31On

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several occasions I was taken out late in a game for a pinch runner, but other slow players on the team were also lifted at times for pinch runners. Every woman should have a team like the Browns!

The number of the irrelevant sentence: __________.

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Because I really had problems only with the new teams, I've concluded that it's

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when people are faced with an unfamiliar situation that they react defensively. 0nce a rival team has gotten used to seeing me on the field, I'm no big deal. 35Still, I suspect that the Browns secretly feel we're a little special. 36After all, we won the championship with a woman on the team.

2. Revising Essays for Support

Exercise:

Both of the essays below lack supporting details at certain key points. In each essay, identify the spots where details are needed.

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Formula for Happiness

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Everyone has his or her own formula for happiness. As we go through life, we

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discover the activities that make us feel best. I've already discovered three keys to happiness. I depend on karate, music, and self-hypnosis.

Karate helps me feel good physically. Before taking karate lessons, I was tired most of the time, my muscles felt like foam rubber, and I was twenty pounds overweight. 7After three months of these lessons, I saw an improvement in my physical condition. 8Also, my endurance has increased. 9At the end of my workday, I used to drag myself home to eat and watch television all night. 10Now, I have enough energy to play with my children, shop, or see a movie. 11Karate has made me feel healthy, strong, and happy.

The spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence _______.

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Singing with a chorus has helped me achieve emotional well-being by expressing

my feelings. 13In situations where other people would reveal their feelings, I would remain quiet. 14Since joining the chorus, however, I have an outlet for joy, anger, or sadness. 15When I sing, I pour my emotions into the music and don't have to feel shy. 16

For this reason, I most enjoy singing certain kinds of music, since they demand real depth of feeling.

The first spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence _______. The second spot occurs after sentence ___________.

Self-hypnosis gives me peace of mind. 18This is a total relaxation technique, which I learned several years ago. 19Essentially I breathe deeply and concentrate on relaxing all my muscles. 20I then repeat a key suggestion to myself. 21Through

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