书面表达-如何扩充句子

英语书面表达指导—— 短话长说

高考评分标准 第五档(21-25)

: 完全完成试题规定的任务，完全达 到了预期的写作目的，覆盖所有的内容要点，用了丰富 的语法结构，语法与高级词汇有少些错误，全篇流畅， 连词使用较好。 第四档(16-20)

: 完全完成试题规定的任务，达到 了预期的写作目的，写漏了一两个要点，语法和词汇基 本正确，有少些错误，主要是想使用高级词汇与复杂句 子所致。

第三档(11-15)

: 大错(时态、句子结构等) 超过五六处，不能及格，写漏了一些内容，但覆盖 了主要要点，基本上让人能够看懂，基本达到了预 期目的。 第二档

(6-10) : 未适当完成试题规定的任务， 有要点，但表达不清晰，只有一些句子可读。 第一档

(1-5) :未完成试题规定的任务，只 是一些字词的堆积，不成句，让读者根本不明白 写什么。 0分：空白，或者抄写一些无关的东西。

高考作文评分原则

1.形式上胜人一筹，也就是文章结构，谴词造句 2.内容要点，发挥想象，适当拓展

如何从形式上胜人一筹？一、利用文章总体模板

1. 文章开头的总体交待

—— 引出主题

A. Recently, we had a discussion about … B. we carried out a survey of … C. When it comes to the topic whether … 2. 呈现不同的观点 —— 陈述观点

A. Some of them are in favor of the idea that… However, others hold a completely opposite opinion. B. Some people firmly believe that…. Others argue that … 呈现论据时常用的连接词 …in the first place, ______(原因一). in the second place, furthermore, _______(原因二). So it goes without saying that _______(观点一). …Some people hold the idea that_______ (观点 二). In their point of view, on the one hand,______(原因 一) . On the other hand, ______ (原因二). Therefore, there is no doubt that ________(观点二). 3. 结尾部分表达个人观点和总结的用语 —— 总结观点 As far as I’m concerned,…/ From my point of view, …/ To sum up, …

二，句式多样，文章增 “靓”.

方法1. 使用从句或非谓语动词使句子高档

Rewrite the sentences1. They arrived at the school. They felt the happy atmosphere. When they arrived at the school, they felt the happy atmosphere. Arriving at the school, they felt the happy atmosphere.2. I will be given another chance. I will succeed. If I am given another chance, I will succeed. Given another chance, I will succeed. 3. He wants to improve his English. He studies hard. In order to improve his English, he studies hard.

1. He didn’t realize his foolishness until he returned home.

方法2. 巧用倒装结构增强句子的表现力 Complete the sentences

Not until he returned home did he realize his foolishness.

2.We can save the earth by changing t

he way we live.Only by changing the way we live can we save the earth. 3.He is clever but he does not work hard.

Clever as/though he is, he does not work hard.4. The clock tower stands on the other side of the street. On the other side of the street stands the clock tower.

方法3. 尝试多样化表达方式In recent years, Beijing has been advancing very fast. All these make people’s lives convenient, pleasant and colorful. _____________________________________________ In recent years, Beijing has been advancing very fast, which_____________________________________ makes people’s lives convenient, pleasant…Beijing, people’s lives are With the development of ______________________ becoming more and more convenient, pleasant and ___________________________________________ colorful. _______

____________________________so ___ that________ Nowadays, Beijing is developing fast people’s live ______________________________________________ are getting more convenient, pleasant and colorful.

1. 使用从句或非谓语动词使 句子高档句式多样

2. 巧用倒装增强句子表现力 文章增“靓”

3. 尝试多样化表达方式

三. 善用高级词汇

Which is better? 1 周末我们会有很多作业要做. A .We have endless homework to do at the weekend. B. We have a lot of homework to do at the weekend . 2 在我所有的老师里,毛老师给我留下了很 深的印象. A. Of all my teachers, I still remember Mr Moore.

B. Of all my teachers, Mr Moore gave me the deepest impression.

3 高级培训班结束后回到家，他的妻子 感到精疲力尽。 A. His wife came back home after the advanced training class, feeling very tired. B. His wife came back home after the advanced training class, feeling very exhausted. 4. 他没听我课上讲的东西。 A.He turned a deaf ear to what I said in the class. B .He didn’t listen to what I said in the class.

如何从形式上胜人一筹？一、利用文章总体模板

二，句式多样，文章增 “靓”. 三. 善用高级词汇

如何在内容上言之有物？

1、附加成分作解释说明方法——添加与所给信息有关的前因后果及条件，目的等内 容例一：这样更方便照顾父母。 拓展：因为父母越来越年迈。 原因

It will be much more convenient to look after your parents as they are getting older and older.例二：因广告过多， 影片放映晚点 。 拓展：这导致观众不耐烦甚至恼火 。 后果

There were so many advertisements that they delayed the time of showing the film, which made audience impatient and some of them even annoyed. making audience impatient and some of them even annoyed.

1、附加成分作解释说明例三：安全出口(exit)标志不明， 存在安全隐患(potential hazard)。 拓展：万一遇到危险， 观众难以逃脱。 条件

The exit is not clear, so there will be potential hazard.In case of danger, it is difficult for t

he audience to escape.